I’m jumping into Jennifer Eaton’s Sunday Snippets Critique Blog Hop this week with my first 250 words of my work in progress! All critiques, reviews, reader reactions, etc. are MORE THAN WELCOME!
The following is a 250-ish word excerpt from my current novel in progress, On The Surface. I’ve written about it here before, but this is the first ever publicly available piece of writing from this particular work. Enjoy!
“I always get confused by the turns in here.”
No one responded. Her mother made this remark nearly every time they visited the cemetery together like this. It really wasn’t that confusing, Liza thought. After all, she figured she could walk to the gravesite from the cemetery gates with her eyes closed, but her family would never believe it.
“Ah, here we go,” she said, easing the car to a stop in front of a large, ancient-seeming oak tree. Liza could see around the tree the rows of little American flags stuck in the ground, flapping in the wind.
Her mother turned around from the driver’s seat, and Liza knew exactly what she was going to say, but she refrained from answering before her mother asked. Liza knew it hurt her feelings when she responded so quickly, and Liza was no longer in the business of hurting her mother’s feelings on purpose. After all, she wasn’t a teenager anymore. She was almost finished with her sophomore year of college, and while she hadn’t gone away to school like most of her friends, she was still way more mature than she had been at 16.
“Liza, you coming with us this time?” It was a request she’d heard countless times, sometimes with a slight variation, but the meaning always the same.
Liza paused, taking a moment to twirl a coil of chestnut-brown hair between her fingers, as if she were really considering it, even if for no one else’s sake but her mother’s.
After a moment, she answered. “No thanks, Mom. You guys go ahead, I’ll wait here.” She glanced out the window so she wouldn’t have to see her mother’s reaction.
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